小学改写作文范文

第一篇：小学改写作文范文

小学作文：乡音——《回乡偶书》改写

乡音——《回乡偶书》改写

因贺知章三十七岁中进士，在此挥泪别乡，贺曰：“今日之别，何时再见?”

在异乡贺知章一做就是43年，贺哭曰：“日长43年，回家探乡，不知故人可好?变化可大哉!吾年逾八十，弃官回乡，不知伙伴可好?叶落归根，吾定要回乡!”

言罢，登上马车，扬长而去。

贺老两鬓已白，看到自己已踏上乡土，不免有些兴，有些衰。乡音并无改，但乡景却大有所改，乡屋大了、宽了;乡道清洁了，广了……贺老笑曰：“吾乡巨变，吾离乡多年，又悲又兴，但又重返故乡，亦是吾一大欣慰之处也!”

贺老踏在乡路上，两个小孩正兴致勃勃地玩儿弹珠，见贺老走来，不免有些陌生，一顽童便笑曰：“不知贵客何来?”贺老也笑曰：“吾乃本乡人。因离乡多年，在外做官，又喜又悲哉!”另一顽童曰：“悲之何处，喜之何处?”贺老曰：“悲之吾离乡多年，今日见乡，想起日夜思乡便催人泪下哉;喜之吾总算重返故乡，叶落归根，又见巨变之乡景，又闻熟悉之乡音，不亦乐乎?”

第二篇：改写的作文

As the old says goes,“Where there is a will, there is a way.”

Nowadays, there is a growing concern over the phenomenon thatsome parents take care of almost everything concerned about their children, including study, work and marriage. Some parents believe that this is love, however, it is only to destroy children’s independence thoroughly.

Attend Your Classes Regularly(最好的问题解决型)

1、现在大学校园里，迟到、早退、旷课是常见的现象

2、保证学生的出勤率对大学教育的重要性

3、作为一个大学生应该怎样做

Class attendance has become a prominent issue facing many university students.(第二句指出问题的所在) some university students are late for or even absent from classes.

Obviously,This behavior which will give rise to Some Adverseeffects on the future development

In fact, it is very important for the students to attend their classes regularly. First, it will ensure you to catch up with the teachers in your learning. That is very helpful to you if you want to do a good job in your study. Second, attending classes regularly is a way of showing respect to your teachers ,too. Your teachers will feel bad if the students do not attend their classes, which, in turn, will affect their teaching and be no good for the students. Third, attending classeswill help to form a good habit of punctuality, which is of great importance for the students to do a good job in the future.

Therefore, we university students should form the good habit of attending our classes regularly from now on. And some day we’ll benefit from it.College Students’ Job Hunting(最好的现象解释型)

1、近几年出现了大学生就业难的现象

2、产生这种现象的原因(如大学生追求的目标过高，专业不对口等)

3、如何解决这一问题(改变就业观念，大学生再培训等)

Employment has become a prominent issue facing many university students, These problems which have already posed a severe threat to our health,some Even have got accustomed to it.some Even have already a very deep feelings so what underlies the salient phenomenon?(参照考研作文书上的前两句，再加上这一句构成了第一段)

There is no doubt that many factors contribute to the Employment. To start with, today’s employers put too much emphasis on employees’ degrees. Under such situation. those with lower education background are less likely to get an ideal job. What is more, false values in our society also account for fake diploma.. People are inclined to think tha they want are “good” jobs which could offer good salary, comfortable working conditions, high social status among others. on the other hand, some students major on campus don not fit in with the demands of jobs. So companies can not take some students into account.

If we let this situation go as it is, We would face even more

severe consequences

文凭造假

There is no doubt that many factors contribute to the phenomenon. To start with, today’s employers put too much emphasis on employees’ degrees. Under such situation. those with lower education background are less likely to get an ideal job. What is more, false values in our society also account for fake diploma. People are inclined to think that the more education he gets, the more respect he will receive. On the contrary, people with poor educational background will be looked down upon, no matter how successful they are.(最好的利弊型)与现象解释不同的在于最后一

句不同，利弊型最重要的是最后一段，也就是我的态度段

1. 目前因特网的作用越来越大 2. 人们对因特网的利弊看法不一

3. 你的看法the Internet has become a prominent issue facing many university students,some even have got accustomed to it.some even have already a very deep feelings.while making our life easier,it may bring us pontential problem as well

the Internet information searching is no longer a tough job with the help of all kinds of search engines. Secondly, we can contact friends or business partners via e-mails or software such as Internet Meeting and Yahoo lists to talk with friends of the same interest. And let them have many ways to find information as well asbroaden our horizons.

the Internet costs considerable time, money and energy especially for those with less self-control. In the second place, surfing on the Internet for a long time harms the eyes a lot. Finally, most young people are indulged in online games, Internet chat 聊天 , which areharmful to their future development.

我的态度段，我的建议段(然后说明我赞成的理由) The past few years witnessed the fast development of the Internet along with national economy. As we know,No one is perfect, no gold is pure gold . as long as we make good use of it the Internet can do us nothing but good A brighter future is awaiting us on the condition that we make good use of the Internet.(就是中间一句话不会写)

Through the above analysis, I believe that the positive aspects overweigh the negative ones. Therefore, I would like to say network is not that horrible, as long as we know more about it and it will become our right hand on our studies if we make good use of it in a correct way.((((个人观点个人观点个人观点个人观点

经典写作句子

we should pay attention to而用Attention should be paid to.

individuals in Growing numbers替换 more and more people

on the condition that 替换 if

1.There is a growing trend these days for many people who live in rural areas to come into and work in city. Which has caused wide public concern in most cities all over the world.

农民进城打工正成为增长的趋势，这一问题在世界上大部分城市已引起普遍关注。 .The dawn of the new century witnessed the increasing popularity of computers. Coincident with the advancement of science and

technology, computers pouring into the current society as a fashion are appealing to growing individuals. 新世纪的曙光目睹了电脑的日益普及。科学技术的进步与重合，涌入当前社会作为一种时尚的计算机是吸引越来越多的个人。 2

3.Although many experts from universities and institutes consistently maintain that it is an inevitable part of an independent life， parents in growing numbers are starting to realize that people， including teachers and experts in education， should pay considerable attention to this problem.

尽管来自高校和研究院的许多专家坚持认为这是独立生活不可避免的一部分，然而越来越多的家长开始意识到包括教师和教育专家在内的人们应该认真对待这一问题。

4.No one can doubt the essential fact that the traffic problem over the last years has caused wide public concern all over the world. Experts in increasing numbers are beginning to believe that such situation would produce unfavorable effects on economic growth of local areas.

没有人能否认这一重要事实：最近几年交通问题在全世界受到了普遍关注。越来越多的专家开始相信这种状况将对当地的经济发展产生不利影响。

5.Moreover， many people， including drivers and cyclists， do not obey the traffic rules properly， especially at busy intersections. And this undoubtedly worsens the already grave situation.

而且，许多人，包括司机和骑自行车的人，不能很好地遵守交通规则，特别是在繁忙的十字路口，这无疑使本已严重的状况雪上加霜。 以上是一些和生活息息相关的例句整理，同学们可以相应的自己寻找更多重要的精品语句，在整个考研英语复习过程中，不断的提升语言的驾驭能力非常重要，这就离不开大量的词汇、语句积累，多读文章固然很重要，但更重要的是记住所读过的各种精品语句，乃至精品文章，反复诵读、不断记忆自然会增加脑海中的知识积累程度，到考研英语写作时自然能够信手拈来，毫不费力的写出精彩的文章，英语作文和中文作文一样，要有突出的亮点来吸引人的眼球，亮点不在多而在精，多加背诵精品语句，对于英语作文分数的提升有很好的帮助。

第三篇：改写作文

Test 1

Part IWriting:

A Letter of Gratitude

Dear Mary,

Many thanks to you for your timely help with my preparations for the CET-4.

Originally I only wanted to ask you for some advice on the coming test, as you were so good at English. But to my surprise, you gave more help to me than I had ever expected. You not only gave me some suggestions but also showed me how I could arrange my time and what I should do in each month before the test. Besides, you lent me the book I needed very much when you learned that I had not yet got it. It was really kind and considerate of you.

Your unreserved help enabled me to make efficient preparations and at last encouraged me to pass the test. I really owe all my success to you. So I would like to extend my heartfelt gratitude again.

Yours truly

Sally

写作思路提示：

第一段：开门见山表达谢意。

第二段：稍加说明感谢原因，并举例说明具体帮助。

第三段：说明帮助所起的作用以及再次感谢。

Test 2

Part IWriting:

Why Do People Keep Pets?

With the increasing improvement of their life, many people are wild about keeping pets. Nowadays, it is very common that we see people taking a walk leisurely with their dear pets along the streets towards evening. At social gatherings people who like keeping pets exchange their experience on taking care of pets. One is not

surprised if a pet costs as high as one’s annual earnings. However, why do people keep pets?

The answer to this problem involves many factors. First, pets make us happy and far from lonely as human companions. Second, pets give us a sense of being important and needed because they depend on us for home, food and drink. Besides, a pet in a family keeps us in touch with the more natural, animal world.

However, it is my belief that some problems can’t be ignored since the growing number of pets may leads to hygiene problems. In many public places pets should be forbidden to enter because they are likely to spread disease and interfere with other people. In short. we should always keep our environment clean at any time.

写作思路提示：

第一段：根据提示简单说明养宠物的现象，提出问题。

第二段：对问题做简单分析。

第三段：简述自己的看法。

Test 3

Part IWriting:

Private Tutoring

A recent investigation shows that private tutoring is “in” and that an increasing number of college students choose to be tutors in their spare time.

Nowadays, on the one hand, many parents are attaching greater importance to education for their children. However, many of them are helpless when their children meet with difficulties in study. Private tutoring may be the better solution. On the other hand, those students who work as tutors usually come from poor families or have financial difficulties, they want to make money for themselves and relieve the burden of their parents. In addition, some students expect to be associated with society by working as tutors.

However, some people think that college students should make good use of their time in study, but not wasting their valuable time as tutors. As for me, it is not a bad thing for college students to be tutored in their spare time as long as they are able to arrange their time well.

写作思路提示：

第一段：根据提示,开门见山提出主题：大学生做家教流行。

第二段：然后简述其原因, 对大学生做家教的利弊做简单分析。

第三段：简述自己的看法。

Test 4

Part IWriting:

Where There is Will ，There is Way

This proverb means that if you are really determined to do something, you will overcome any difficulties until you eventually succeed.

If one wants to succeed in doing something, he must obtain great courage to face and overcome any difficulties he encounters on his way to achieve the goal. He should learn to strengthen his will and can’t allow failures to defeat him. Many successful people home and abroad have achieved amazing achievements just because they have such characters.

Let’s take English study for example , many people want to learn English well, but the result is usually opposite to their wish just because those people are lack of strong will to win through obstacles and to keep learning English often. However, those who are really determined to learn English well are never afraid of difficulties in learning English and always persist in learning it. Therefore, they can finally succeed in learning English well and really master a foreign language.

写作思路提示：

1. 简单解释作文题的含义。

2. 简单阐述为什么“有志者事竟成“的道理。

3. 举例说明主题的正确性。

Test 5

Part IWriting:

Job Problems for College Graduates

According to the charts, only 48 percent of graduates in 1994 could find jobs related to their majors, compared with 89 percent in 1981 when china had its first college graduates after the Cultural Revolution. Why do college graduates find it increasingly difficult to get a satisfactory and rewarding job?

One reason perhaps is that many colleges and universities fail to get their curricula to the development of industries. Degree courses offered in many colleges and universities are so out-dated and irrelevant and impractical that employers as well as students themselves find it hard to translate their book knowledge into real job skills.

Secondly, there is an oversupply of graduates with certain specialty, and this oversupply is increasing. The result is that many of them cannot

enter the profession for which they are trained and have to take other jobs which even do not require a college degree.

On the other hand, the disparity in pay between intellectual work and business management has frustrated the hope and ambition of the graduates who major in education, administration and liberal arts.

College graduates are, so to speak, valuable resources in our country. The problems they encounter in job hunting deserve more attention form the colleges and the government. The colleges should get students out of the ivory tower and gear their courses to the real needs of industry and business; while the government should provide college graduates with more vocational opportunities, better working conditions and decent salaries.

开头用“according to”对图表简单进行叙述，在核心段用“one reason is that; secondly;on the other hand”进行详细论证。最好结尾表达自己的观点，总结全文并回答文章开头所提出的问题。

第四篇：古诗改写作文

朝花夕拾?晚矣!

八二班吴映璇

朝露易干，秋至叶落，百川东去不复回!少壮不努力，老大徒伤悲!

——题记

朝露干

天上有许多蓝，阳光分给大地许多温暖，寂寞了一夜的柳默默地吐着绿色的心事，又一个充满希望的朝来了!年幼无知的孩子只知和蜜蜂蝴蝶玩耍，孰不知，朝露已干„„

午也逝

红日高挂，照得向日葵笑弯了腰，瞧着自己戴满了果实的头。知了在用自己即将结束的短暂生命歌唱着激情、欢悦。而那孩子则在午睡，、仍不知朝花未撷„„ 花夕拾

天边夕阳渐落，一丝凉意袭来，待那孩子想起，花已凋败，为时太晚。拾起落花，才知时光已逝，独徒伤悲„„

静夜思

此时才明了：光阴似百川，东去不复回!少壮不努力，老大徒伤悲!

朝花夕拾?晚矣!

——后记

青葵••时光•悲

八(2)班高诗语

我漫步在这青葵的海洋中，回想着时光的足迹，一时间有些迷惘和悲伤„„——题记

我记得这片青葵，记得它们给我的启示，记得它们一年四季的变化，记得它们的绽放和枯萎„„

春葵

那时候的葵只有现在的一半高。才是初春，就已经那么绿了，还泛着亮，迎着光看时，闪闪地。它们使我意识到春天来了，万物复苏了;它们使我留意到在我身旁溜过的时间，使我更加发奋努力。

夏葵

再去看青葵时，已经是盛夏了。太阳好像比我还爱这片葵，洒下了金色的阳光来照顾它们。它们也很珍惜这恩泽，努力的向上长着，更加茁壮美丽，闪耀着夺目的光芒。

秋葵

秋天还是来了，这是我最不愿看到的。青葵也不是名副其实的“青”葵了。它们的花叶也差不多全枯黄了，在茎上挂着，被深秋的风吹得飘动着，像吊在悬崖上的绳子。凄凄凉凉的，让人看了不得不怀念它们夏日的辉煌„„

冬葵

时间飞逝，转眼已是寒冬了。雪把枯萎的青葵埋了一大半，露出来那仅有的一

点在寒风中瑟瑟发抖，看起来便觉得很可怜„„

时光在那些看似平淡无奇的日子里悄无声息的流淌着，如河水只向东流，却不能向西回返一样，时光就这样一去不复返了。

我想，我要像青葵那样，用少时的努力和绽放来见证时间的飞逝。而不是虚度光阴。

青葵的成长给我深刻的启示和无限的动力来见证时光的流逝，从此不再迷惘，长大后也不会悲伤!

——后记

人生一曲《长歌行》

晚风吹过，我才知道什么是悔。

——题记

如果我是诗人，我要吟出珍惜光阴的诗篇，那该多好。

如果我是画家，我要画出珍惜光阴的图卷，那该多好。

如果我是歌者，我要唱出珍惜光阴的乐曲，那该多好。

可我只是一名普通的学生，只是一个少年，那些如流水一般的日子，流逝在电脑前钱的专心致志;流逝在操场的汗流浃背，流逝在电视前的笑语欢歌，流逝在同学间的吵吵闹闹，一滴一滴的，却很少流逝在书本里。

陶渊明有诗云：“一日难再晨，盛年不再来”鲁迅先生也说过：“时间就像海绵里的水，只要想挤，总是有的”朱自清先生更是奋笔疾书《匆匆》，还有太多太多的智者先贤给予我们珍惜时间的启示，难道我们就应任时间飞逝而无动于衷吗?

当然不能!孔子曰：“逝者如斯夫，不舍昼夜”我们便应与时间赛跑，从分分秒秒中获得最大的收益!

我又忽得想起了我那点点滴滴的时间，为他们叹惋着，落泪着，怎想的新的时间又坠入那无穷无尽的黑洞中，于是我茫然着，彷徨着，于是新来的日子也消失在过眼云烟中了。仿佛一张巨大的网，吞噬着一切范围之内的东西，丝丝点点都被吞噬着，无影无踪了。

怎么办?

——卸下一切包袱，轻装上阵，与时间赛跑!尽情的在学海里遨游，与好书为友，与知识为伴，岂不快哉?岂不妙哉!

我恍惚明白了似的。

晚风依旧吹，荷花别样红!

百年一世，如白驹过隙，劝君谨记，人生一曲《长歌行》!

青青园中葵，朝露待日晞。

阳春布德泽，万物生光辉。

常恐秋节至，焜黄华叶衰。

百川东到海，何时复西归?

少壮不努力，老大徒伤悲!

——后记

林中小感

八(2)班张一然

独自一人，走在林中幽幽的小路上，心莫名其妙地静。

一条小河，汨汨地从树木中穿过，清澈见底。小河的归宿在哪儿?是了，它汇入滔滔江水中，然后，就会流入海潮的大海。在那里，它将得到永远的生命——只可惜，这里，将永远见不到它了。那以后流过的，永远不会是先前那条小河了。

正这么想着，猛然见到河中一只小“小舟”——那是片柳叶，还微微存留着绿色——为什么它不在树上?很愚蠢的问题。它的寿命到头了，就永远地离开了那赖以生存的树木，化作肥料，哺育下一丛嫩绿。

脚下，落叶被踩碎发出了又干又生硬的声音，实在算不上动听，可这就是它们生命最后的交响曲。明天，或许，这些音乐家中的某位就消失不见了——与它身下的泥土融合，成为新生命的源头。尽管它们是为了哺育新的生命，可这仍然太残忍——明年，虽说还会有新叶，可不会是它们了。有人说，来年的新叶是它们生命的延续。我想不是，它们的灵魂，早已成为泥土的一部分，永远不会重生了。

不知不觉，夕阳的余辉透过稀疏的叶子，斑斑驳驳地照到我身上。明天，虽然还会有新的红日，可永远不会是今天的了。

抬头，小河，树木，落日，构成了一幅凄凉的图画。是啊，此年，此月，此日，此时，此刻，一去不复返了„„

长歌行·葵园青青sunmengt

八年级二班孙梦恬

夜色还未散尽，园中的葵还没有那种欣欣向荣的姿色。在光与暗的交接处，我望

眼欲穿，仿佛看见了连那叶尖的露水，都在企盼着那一轮红日的身影。

时间流失地飞快，眨眼之间，葵园已经葱绿如荫了。我看见阳光的恩泽已经渗透进大地的每一个角落，它融化了万物心底的阴霾，也融化了所有挡住时间前进的坚冰。时间从不为什么停下来看一看。它只是匆匆地走，匆匆地离开。我们常常感叹秋的凄凉与绝美，因为它是花叶凋零衰败的日子。

我揉揉额头，园中的向日葵已变成金色，看久了，会觉得刺眼呢。

我静静地走到小溪旁，掬起一捧水洒在脸上，清清凉凉，好舒服!我看着小溪向东流去，心中浮出了一个成语：海纳百川，东流至海。这水，一去不复返，宛如时光飞逝，毫无顾虑，不留情面。什么时候，溪水你能向西流;什么时候，时间你能再轮一周，谁能够挽回过去的错误，弥补现在的后悔?

现在若有后悔……唉，只有以后惜时如金吧!“少壮不努力，老大徒伤悲”……向日葵垂下了头，太阳头也不回地大步离开……

第五篇：怎样写作文改写

改写

(1)什么是改写。

改写是改变原文表现形式的一种写法。相对于其他表现形式(扩写、缩写、续写)来说，在写法和表现形式上是比较自由的。可以对作品的体裁、结构、人称、描述方法、语言等方面进行改写。

(2)改写的一般操作步骤。

①阅读原文，准确把握原文内容。

只有在熟练掌握原文主要内容的前提下，才能合理地对原文进行改写。如《小马过河》的故事，文中的小马替妈妈到磨坊去磨面，在被小河拦住去路的时候，小马犹豫了。老牛说水很浅，而松鼠却说水很深，弄得小马没有了主意，只好跑回家去问妈妈。虽然后来过了河，毕竟浪费了时间。若是你，你会怎样写《小马过河》呢?你可能会写：小马没听任何人的劝告，自己试探着过了河，完成了妈妈交给自己的任务。还可能会写其他的内容，这完全由同学们自己支配，但要合乎情理。

②对照原文，在内容或形式上体现创新。

一般来说，改写后的文章，或许比原文更有趣，或许比原文更有新意……这样，被改写的文章才会产生较强的吸引力。如《我要的是葫芦》一文，文中种葫芦的人不听邻居的劝告，到了秋天，一个葫芦都没收到，这样的结果多令人惋惜呀。如果是你，你将怎样改变种葫芦人的命运呢?要么依旧，要么发生了翻天覆地的变化……但越符合人们的意愿越好!③认真构思，注意结构的完整性。

为增强文章的感染力，除保留原文的韵味外，还应有自己的独到见解，尤其是内容和结构一定要不拘泥于原文，这样，写出的文章才会有新意。还要在反复阅读的基础上，进行合理的加工、修改，使改写后的文章更完美。虽然是改写，也要注意讲究条理清楚、层次分明，前后的照应，保持结构的完整性。

④阅读习作，反复修改加工。

抓住这样几个关键点，把握好修改的尺度。

a.改写文是否是建立在原文的基础之上的。两者是相辅相成的，千万不要割裂开来。b.改写的时候是否围绕原文的中心增加了必要的情节、细节和语句，是否注意丁详略安排得当。

c.改写是否是大段大段地抄写原文。要注意在理解原文的基础上，用自己的话来写。

(3)改写的方式。

①改写课文中的人物(人称)或事件发生的时间、地点等。

②用不同的文体改写，如：将对话改为叙述，将戏剧改为故事等。③只改写原文中的某一段或某几段。

通过改写，不仅可加深对原文的理解，帮助掌握基本语法和基本词汇，避免语言错误，而且也能培养逻辑思维和灵活运用语言的能力，为写作文打好基础。